Sailor Nothing Chapter 2: by Stefan Gagne (2000)

 Chapter 2

Still chugging along with copyworking this. I don't think I want to do the normal bonus, summary, commentary format for these.

Chapter 2 shows a great quirk of (especially in this era) fanwork/amateur writing. Weird attention to some details, but not all. The are a lot of typos, spelling mistakes, grammar errors, etc. Not enough to be unreadable, but more than in chapter 1. But, there is enough weirdly specific attention to detail to do things like change the fake computer being used to take notes because a different character is doing it.

There's also a lot of weird floating in around in the narrator voice. Not just the (marked) head hopping, but bopping between a close and far third for the same character.

The smores at the end are good.

No rape. The internet made me think someone was going to get raped like twice a chapter. Aki's yamiko is still sexual, but not rapey.

I totally forgot Aki (Sailor Beauty) was second, I thought it was the reporter girl (Shin?)

I dunno, these are hard to write up because they're so long and I take so long to do them.

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